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the human heart

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It beats coldly in
a sheltered place, only to
warm with openness.

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  1. alarob
    Friday, November 21, 2008, 9:27 pm
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    You know, these are not traditional haiku, but I like them a lot. English speakers often just fold a 17-syllable sentence into three lines and call it a haiku. It’s a pet peeve of mine. It’s also essentially what you’re doing — but somehow it works most of the time. Each line is its own element, or something. It’s not strict haiku, but it’s good writing.

  2. Wade
    Saturday, November 22, 2008, 9:51 pm
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    Thanks!

    It’s not even close to traditional haiku, since I don’t always include nature images.

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